THE RAW STUFF
Okay, this is the raw stuff. No editing (unless I spotted it while writing... which I rarely do). Here you'll find all my dirty, messy, non-sensical words that my brain threw out, written down pretty much fresh from brain to page. Scary!
It's likely that things will look markedly different by the time I'm ready to publish.
I should warn those with more refined sensibilities that I generally don't do four-letter words or overly graphic stuff, but sometimes it drops out of my brain that way. This is unedited so I haven't polished my characters up and made them presentable for the general public so they may say or do things that aren't that nice.
For what it's worth... enjoy 😅.
PS - I should probably add SPOILER ALERT!!
We meet our hero who has a rather disturbing vision. (For the eagle eyes out there, this is a version without the four letter words. My mother didn't like them 😬 and we should always keep our mothers happy.)
Chapter 2 - New
Chapter 2 (now 3)
Sorry - I've changed Andrew's name to Bastion. He goes down the stairs and finds something unexpected. Think I'll need to work on tightening up the description here as not sure it paints enough of a picture.
Bastion is struggling with what his father told him. It was all a bit much. We meet his best friend Myra. I think I'll need to rewrite her into chapter 1, because I don't know who those guys were. A pretty short chapter here. The point is to kinda show him not really accepting what his father was telling him, but still wanting answers.
It's time we saw a bit more of mum, so Bastion goes to visit her to see if he can get anything out of her. I enjoyed writing this - insane asylums are always interesting places to read, or watch about. But, think I still need to add some detail in this one.
(Everything here is copyright to Jared Viljoen. Which means, if you steal stuff the interweb goblins will come looking for you and trust me, you don't want that.)